The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.

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The
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graph delineates the information about the population of men and women in various
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countries. The
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percentage of male and
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female
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literacy rate are present in the following
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to 2004 time period,
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as in Africa, America, Asia, Europe and
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Oceania
. In detail, as we scrutinise the given graph, it demonstrates that the world contain total percentage of males and females in literacy , which is about 82.2
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the male count is 87.2%
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the female count is 77.35% from 2000 to 2004
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. In
Africa
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the total number is 62.5% as male is 71.65% in abundance compared to female which is 53.9% , which is lower than all other
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as Asia, America and Oceania. In the
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if we compare, Europe has the most litracy rates among other
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. As it shows 98.8% in men and 98.5% in female topping all other
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2000 to 2004 , showing high-talent and experienced individuals are groomed there.

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  • literacy rate
  • estimated figures
  • region
  • gender
  • male
  • female
  • percentage
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • similar
  • almost all
  • the highest rate
  • the lowest rate
  • gap
  • difference
  • compare
  • in contrast
  • while
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  • respectively
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