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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map shows a map of the
city
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 of Brandfield with all significant features. The main points on the map are S1 and S2 for
shopping
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the shopping
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 mall, golf course and park, housing
estate
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,
city
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centre
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, industrial
estate
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, river,
road
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, and
railway
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the first site is located near the housing
estate
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 to the northwest, and
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city
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the city
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centre
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 to the south .
On the other hand
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, the second site is surrounded by
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city
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the city
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centre
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 to the northwest and
industrial
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the industrial
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estate
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 to the northeast. Moving to a more detailed analysis, beside S1 is a
railway
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, which goes from northwest to southeast through
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city
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the city
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centre
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.
In addition
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,
river
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a river
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 runs through the
centre
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,
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railway
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a railway
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, and
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road
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a road
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 from north to southwest. In terms of S2,
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railway
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the railway
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 goes to the right corner,
while
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road
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the road
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 is located near the left corner.
Also
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,
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road
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the road
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 is positioned left
to
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of
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 the S1.
Golf
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The golf
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 course and park are located in the western part of the
city
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, without any fast connection to the first or second site.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, estate, centre, road, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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