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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

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The map
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the centre of Paris and two posibble place, where
company
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the company
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 wants to locate a new
restourant
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restaurant
.
Location
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 1 is situated on the right bank of the river. It is established near the park to the east and near the Bir Hakeim Bridge to the south. The Maritime museum is positioned to the northeast
in regard
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with
the
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regard to the
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 first
location
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.
Also
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, 8000 people visit the
musem
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museum
 every day.
On the other hand
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,
location
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 2 occupies the position beside the Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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, which has nearly 16000 visitors each day.
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, the park is located
to the
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south of the second
location
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.
Also
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 important to mention that to the east of
this
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location
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 is situated
Art
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an art
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 gallery with 750 visitors each day. In conclusion, the second
location
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 is better because of
larger
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the larger
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 flow of people in comparison to the first
location
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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