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You work for an International company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr. John I hope
this
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 email finds you in good health. I am writing
this
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 email to request
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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allow me to
work
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 from
company's
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the company's
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head
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office
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 in Dubai for six months. As you are aware, I
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work
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have been working
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 remotely from my home since I joined your company, and I have never visited the
head
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office
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. I would love the opportunity to
work
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 there and meet my colleagues in-person.
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, I will be able to attend the IT conference
which
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, which
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 is scheduled in July at the
head
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office
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. During
this
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 time, I can manage to
work
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 from the
head
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office
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 with
the
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apply
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my other colleagues. Since
,
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apply
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 our project
work
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 is almost
finish
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finished
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, there will be less workload which can easily be managed. I would
also
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 request you to please arrange a room and a laptop for me at the
head
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office
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, so that I can manage my
work
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 smoothly without any disturbance.
Thankyou
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Thank you
 for your time and consideration. Sincerely, Anum

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task response
Task response: Answer all 3 parts with a bit more detail. Say more about why this move will help you and the company.
task response
Task response: Ask for help in a clear way, like support with travel, desk space, and approval.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like also, so, and because.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check small word order and grammar issues, because they can make the flow less clear.
task response
Task response: You answered all parts of the task.
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Task response: The tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your paragraphs mostly stay on one topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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