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Traffic congestion has become a serious issue for many cities around the globe. What are the effects of traffic congestion? How could this issue be resolved?

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Nowadays,
traffic
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 gridlock has become a huge problem for urban areas across the world, mainly because of
lack
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a lack
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 of
state-of-art-infrastructure
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state-of-the-art infrastructure
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. The government should pay attention
on
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to
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this
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 problem gradually
with
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by
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 making
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 daily commute
system
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. To start with,
state-of-art-infrastructure
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state-of-the-art infrastructure
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 is the main aspect of reducing the
traffic
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 jam in the city. If the
roads
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 are crowded and not well-connected driver can face the gridlocks
especially
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, especially
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,
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apply
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of the city.
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, Delhi’s
crowded
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busy
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roads
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 in India are quite crowded not only for vehicles but
also
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 for pedestrians,
as well as
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 well-connected
roads
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 in India,
the
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apply
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vehicles are
staying
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stuck
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 in
a
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apply
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congestion for hours.
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, it may
be occurred
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lead
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 to huge gridlock
after
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, after
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that
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which
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 we can face road
rages
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rage
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 and
traffic
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 accidents. In terms of solution,
government
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the government
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 should invest more in well-connected networks to improve daily commute not only for
who
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those who
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 use public transport but
also
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 car drivers
,
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.
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 It should create
modern
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a modern
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traffic
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examine
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examination
system
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 to let
traffic
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 light
according to
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situation
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the situation
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not
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, not
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 to
timer
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a timer
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.
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, in China
in
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, in
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countryside
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the countryside
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traffic
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 light for
train
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trains
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 and
for
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apply
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cars
one
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,
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 and it works suing AI, if it has chance to accident with
train
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a train
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,
light
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the light
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colored to
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turns
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 red for cars.
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, cities can prevent huge gridlocks with modern state-of-the-art-infrastructure. In conclusion, individuals are facing problems with
traffic
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 congestion across the world in cities
it
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, which
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 is because of
old
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old,
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 well-rounded
roads
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 and
create
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the need to create
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new
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a new
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system of
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apply
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daily commute
system
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.
However
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, with all facilities (
traffic
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 lights using AI,
state of the art
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state-of-the-art
 infrastructure
)
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),
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cities may reduce the percentage of
traffic
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 jams.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You talk about causes too much, but the task asks for effects and solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas clearer. Each body paragraph should have one main idea and explain it step by step.
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Use examples that fit the point better. Some examples are hard to understand or not clearly linked.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple and clear way, like first, also, as a result, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one clear reason or one clear example.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You give some solutions, such as better roads and smart traffic lights.
task response
The topic stays mostly about traffic problems in cities.
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