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The chart below show the changes that took place in three areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.

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The provided line chart illustrates the
ulternate
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trend
 in three
part
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parts
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 of crime:Burglary, Car theft and Robbery, in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 of New Port, over a 9-year
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period from
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 2003 to 2012.
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overall
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Overall
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,
The
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the
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 number of
lncidents
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incidents
 in robbery started at the lowest point
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then
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, then
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 showed a
stesdy
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steady
 rise throughout the
few
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apply
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first
years
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few years
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.
While
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cars
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car
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 theft fluctuated, peaking in the
all
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entire
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 period.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 burglary reached the largest number
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then
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, then
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 saw a
significantly
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significant
 decline over
all
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the entire
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 period. The
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figure
 for robbery had risen to around 900
incidents
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 in 2005 before
drop
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dropping
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 to 500
incidents
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 in 2008.
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, in 2004 burglary reached the highest number
overall
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which
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, which
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approximately
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was approximately
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 3800
incidents
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 ,
then
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 went down to 1100
incidents
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 in 2008. After a slight soar over the next 3 years.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
cars
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car
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 theft figuer stabilize in
few
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the
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 first
years
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few years
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 started from 2003 to 2005,
whereas
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 sink in 2006 to 2000
incidents
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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