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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

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The
number
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 of holidaymakers who travelled to Caribbean islands, over an 8-year period from 2010 to 2018, measured in millions, is illustrated by the given line graph.
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, it can be seen that the total
of
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number of
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guest
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 who stay on both ships and the island is dominant, with a significant increase over all the past 7 years.
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 the
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the island
slightly
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 declined over the past few years.
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,
to
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cruise ship
visitors
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 showed a fluctuating upward trend. In detail, the
visitors
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 who preferred to stay at cruise ships was in lowest
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 in the beginning period,
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 to 2013 , when the
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 began to rise noticeably, and continued to reach 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
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,
overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 was the largest
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 , especially
at the end
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 of the period; reached 3.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
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, the population stayed an island during the first two years was steady and suitable before it rose dramatically from 2011 to 2015, from 0.6
million
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 to reach 1.5
million
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visitors
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 respectively. Mean increased approximately one-third from the starting point.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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