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Technology has impacted on the way people interact. These days, many people use technologies such as mobile phones and the internet to meet and communicate. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using technology to establish and develop relationships?

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friends
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video calls and
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messages
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communicate
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websites
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the internet
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internet
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useful
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Answer both sides more clearly. Write one clear good side and one clear bad side.
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Add a stronger main idea in each body part, then explain it step by step.
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Use one or two simple real examples to make your ideas more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph easy to follow. Start with the main point, then add support.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it.
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You answered the question about good and bad sides.
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You gave an example about letters in the past and fast messages now.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like however, for example, and in conclusion.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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