IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The chart below shows the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
The pie chart illustrates the average proportions of three nutrients in typical meals, all of which may have adverse health effects if consumed in excess.
Overall
Linking Words
,
dinner
Use synonyms
 accounted for the highest shares of both sodium and saturated fat,
whereas
Linking Words
snacks
Use synonyms
 were the principal source of added sugar.
By contrast
Linking Words
,
breakfast
Use synonyms
 consistently recorded the lowest proportions across all three nutrients. Looking at sodium, the highest proportion was observed in
dinner
Use synonyms
 at 43%, followed by lunch at 29%,
while
Linking Words
breakfast
Use synonyms
 and
snacks
Use synonyms
 shared the lowest figure at 14% each. A similar pattern can be seen in saturated fat, with
dinner
Use synonyms
 making up the largest proportion at 37%, followed by lunch (26%) and
snacks
Use synonyms
 (21%),
whereas
Linking Words
breakfast
Use synonyms
 represented the smallest share at 16%.
In contrast
Linking Words
 to the other two nutrients, added sugar was most heavily concentrated in
snacks
Use synonyms
, which accounted for 42% of the total intake.
Dinner
Use synonyms
 ranked second at 23%,
while
Linking Words
 lunch and
breakfast
Use synonyms
 contributed more modest figures of 19% and 16%, respectively.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, snacks, breakfast with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: