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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email ·give details of the purchase ·describe the problem

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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/
madam
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Madam
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, I am very unsatisfied with my recent purchase on
the
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apply
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Amazon. I ordered
pink
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a pink
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 saree for my wife and
kurta
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a kurta
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 for me
but
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apply
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,
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but
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it's not what
i
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I
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 ordered. I bought
black
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a black
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 kurta for
me but
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myself
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,
the
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but the
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color i
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colour I
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 got is brown
and
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, and
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 it's
fadded
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faded
 from the bottom.
Quality
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The quality
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 of both the
product
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products
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 is
vey
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very
 low.
Also
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,
saree
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the saree
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 is not
same
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the same
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like i
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as I
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 ordered. I bought so many things from the amazon
but
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i
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I have
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 never seen
this
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 type of mistake in any of my
order
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orders
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, so
i
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I
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 am really
unsatisfy
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unsatisfied
 with your service
this
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 time.
Additionally
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, I have to attand family function for which
i
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I
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 bought
this
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 kurta and saree. Please replace
as
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it as
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 soon as possible or issue the refund. Your faithfully, Rahul

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Say what you bought, when you bought it, and what was wrong in a clear way.
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Ask for one clear action at the end, like a new item or your money back.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in one paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words like and, but, so, because.
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Check the start and end of the letter. Use Dear Sir or Madam and Yours faithfully.
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You said what items you bought and who they were for.
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You told the main problems with color and quality.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, problem, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your request for replace or refund is clear.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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