You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answering describe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they would be about explain why you would be a suitable teacher

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inform you about an advertisement I would like to apply
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I saw the
brochore
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brochure
on the bulletin board at the Mukai station yesterday. I noticed you are
recruting
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recruiting
an artist teacher at the moment.
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why I would like to work in your community college for a
while
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. Please let me introduce myself. I am an artist, and I have been opening my art class
afternoon
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in the afternoon
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,
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apply
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every weekdays and I have a bunch of experience as a teacher.
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, I would like to apply for
delinquent
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the delinquent
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students class, because I was
kind of
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a
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delinquent student when I was a high school student. So I may understand their feeling and attitude though teaching
arts
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the arts
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.
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, I have been working as a social supporter for these students.
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I probably deal with these pupils no matter what
happen
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happens
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. I would appreciate it
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you get back to me as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Kazuya Nakagawa

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task response
For task response: answer all parts more clearly. Say the ad name, the class name, what you will teach, and why you are a good teacher in a full way.
task response
For task response: use clear and right details. 'Delinquent students class' does not match the ad about night classes, so this part is not fully on topic.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: put ideas in a clearer order. First say which ad, then the course, then your work history, then why you fit the job.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: link ideas with easy words like 'also', 'because', 'so', and 'therefore', but use them in a smooth way.
task response
For task response: you answer the ad and say you want to teach arts.
task response
For task response: you give reasons for your fit, such as your art class and work with students.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the second paragraph keeps most of the main ideas together.
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