You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include •Where you stayed •What the problems were •How they can fix your complaints

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Dear Sir/Ma, My name is Sarah Martins
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I recently stayed at your hotel, Lakeview Hotel, near the beach house, situated a few blocks away from the city centre. I stayed
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one of your double deluxe
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, the room number was 309
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the top floor. I was in for a conference meeting with my organisation
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together
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with my colleagues as well. I'm writing to whom it may concern, about my unpleasant experience at your hotel
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I encountered quite a number of issues during my stay.
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, I had an issue with the air conditioner not working,
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, the television was not connected, as it kept showing a blank screen
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lastly
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, the most uninteresting part
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was the issue with the internet. I'm reaching out to ensure these complaints are fixed, to avoid future reoccurence and to express my dissatisfaction.
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, I know
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can be fixed by taking a detailed review of what was listed and ensuring the right technicians
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into
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issue.
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, a facility and quality check should always be carried out before having guests
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to any of the rooms. I would love my complaints to be swiftly attended
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a better experience if
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get to visit again. Best Regards, Sarah Martins.

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Say more clearly what you want the hotel to do, like say sorry, give money back, or fix the room checks.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear purpose in each part: first the stay, then the problems, then the fix.
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Use linking words carefully. Some parts are too long and can be split into shorter lines.
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Keep the tone polite and direct. Do not use words like 'the most uninteresting part'.
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You answered all parts of the task: where you stayed, the problems, and how to fix them.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
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The problems are easy to follow because you list them in order.
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