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The graph gives information about Dubai Gold Sales in 2002 Dubai Gold Sales 2002 Millions of Dirhams 400 300 200 100 Jan Feb Mar Apr May Jun Jul Aug Sep Oct Nov Dec

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The line graph shows
sales
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 from
Gold
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 in Dubai in 2002, and
this
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 is recorded in millions of
dirhams
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.
Overall
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, it is apparent that
sales
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 were highest in March,
while
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 July and September saw the lowest figures,
although
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 there was a downward trend over the period.
To begin
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, upon inspection of the
Gold
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sales
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 during the first half of the year, 200
million
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dirhams
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 of
Gold
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 were sold in January. Having seen a considerable rise in two months, by March, it had peaked at more than 300
million
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dirhams
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.
In contrast
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,
this
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 dropped significantly over a few months, and by June it had fallen to less than 200
million
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Dirhams
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.
Furthermore
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, during the remainder of the year, the revenue from selling
Gold
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 continued to decline substantially to approximately 100
million
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dirhams
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 by July. Climbing to reach 200
million
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dirhams
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 in August, it returned to roughly 100
million
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dirhams
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 by September.
Sales
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 in subsequent months rose modestly, returning to 200
million
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dirhams
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 by the end of the year.

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