The charts give information about the percentage of men and women who had driving licences in one European country in various years.

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The bar charts provide information about how many male and female
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had driver licences and the percentage of young
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in one European country in various years.
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, the rate of male
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who had licences dominated over the period,
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having driving licences increased without decreasing in both gender
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the rest of the period. Notably, the level of young
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declined over a decade. In the initial year, licensed male
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started with a high interest
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their female counterparts began with a low figure, 70% and 30% respectively.
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the percentage of male
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remained unchanged, the number of female
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rose by 5% in 1981. In the final year, both gender
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represent
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however
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, the level of
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male
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still dominates and reached the peak point of 80%. As for women
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, their percentage doubled in 2006, from 30% to 60% In 1996, driving was popular among
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, especially among males. Young
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represented half a per cent
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their women counterpats was only 30%. Over a decade,
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, the rates have decreased in both genders. Male young
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drivers figure
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slightly dropped to around 45% when female young
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trend sharply decreased to 20%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words drivers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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