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The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.

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The
multible
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multiple
 lines illustrate
for
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three different transport
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modes
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used by
worker
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workers
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 in
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the
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United Kingdom over 60 years
between
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, between
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 1970 and 2030.
Overall
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,
cars
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 are the most used by
employer
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employers
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 in
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the
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UK in
whole
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the whole
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periods
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period
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.
Cars
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 and trains have increased
sginificantly
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significantly
 in the
last
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 ten years.
On the other hand
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,
transporting
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transportation
 by buses has
decliened
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declined
 in
recent
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the recent
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 period.
To begin
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 with,
cars
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 and trains have
rase
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risen
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 gradually,
whereas
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cars
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apply
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the number of commuters
have
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has
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 increased from 5 to 9 millions in 1970 and 2030, respectively.
In addition
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, the number of commuters
have
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 increased from 2 to 5 millions in 1970 and 2030, respectively. The number of workers have slightily reduced from 4.5 to 3 in the same period.
To sum up
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, the
transporting
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transportation
 by
cars
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most
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was most
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 used in
UK
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the UK
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 throughout
1970
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the years 1970
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and
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to
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 2030
years
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apply
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • average number
  • traveling
  • transportation
  • period
  • analyzed
  • trends
  • significant
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaked
  • examination
  • growth
  • decline
  • factors
  • contributed
  • noticeable
  • increase
  • decrease
  • speculating
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • usage
  • shifts
  • preference
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • environmental concerns
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • conclusion
  • summarizing
  • findings
  • preferences
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