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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart demonstrates the reasons why publics used to
work
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 by bicycle or car.
Overall
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,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
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people
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of people
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choice
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choose
 cycling to
work
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 because
their
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of their
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 health and fitness,
less
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and less
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 pollution make a good. Figure for driving, every
people
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 choice the driving because there feels very
comfort to join
Replace the word
comfortable joining
work
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. In terms of cycling, health and fitness, less pollution is
big
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a big
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 motivation for
people
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, it was 30% in the chart Figure for cyclelist, there are no parking problem in an anywhere,
this
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 is
the
Correct article usage
a
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 big advantage, it was 15%. And
.
Punctuation problem
apply
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 another two reasons are no costs and faster than driving, it was 13% and 12% in good advantage used cycle. Regrading for the remaining, the number of
people
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 use to
driving
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drive
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,
these
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most of these
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are most good facilities is comforts
Correct word order
facilities are comfortable
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, it was 40%
people
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 used
.
Correct pronoun usage
them.
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 21%
people
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 follow
distance
Correct article usage
the distance
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 to
work
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 because there used driving to
work
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. And the most common
and
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apply
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advantage is faster than cycling,
need
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as you need
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 to carry things to
work
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 more
Linking Words
then
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than
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 cycling. It was both 14%
people
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to
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 used driving only
these
Change preposition
for these
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 reasons.
Lastly
Linking Words
, 11%
people
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 think driving
safer
Verb problem
is safer
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 than cycling.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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