Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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took the budget for two months after they
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a job, they have to collect hours for being
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in the church, or being a cleaner to
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public area or transportation. The reason why these
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should do valuntary because it is
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at least
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pay the
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if the
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are going to support these unemployed
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not even deserve any benefits from it
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the
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feel fair, the
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should keep doing voluntary is
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must to
do for return
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give
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something back to our society.

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Answer the main question more fully. Say not only yes, but also why this is good and what limits there should be.
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Add one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it with a simple reason and one example.
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Be careful with meaning. Some parts are hard to understand, so your ideas are not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion. Start each body part with one topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Some jumps are too fast, so the reader may get lost.
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You give a clear opinion from the start: people on benefits should give something back.
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You include examples, such as work in a church or cleaning public places.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words like For example, In addition, and To conclude.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term job seekers
  • Government benefits
  • Voluntary work
  • Community service
  • Employability
  • Sense of purpose
  • Mental health
  • Stigma
  • Unemployed
  • Public funds
  • Positively impact
  • Community
  • Exploit
  • Vulnerable individuals
  • Devalue
  • Volunteerism
  • Informal contributions
  • Skill-matching
  • Beneficial and fulfilling
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