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The line graph shows changes in the number of visitors to three different museums between June and September 2013

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The line graph shows changes in the number of visitors to three different museums between June and September 2013
The line graph shows changes in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to three different
museums
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 between
June
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 and September 2013.
Overall
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, the British and
Science
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museums
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 experienced upward trends in visitor numbers, with the former seeing considerable fluctuations,
while
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 the Natural History
Museum
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 witnessed an
overall
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 decline. Notably, the ranking of the
museums
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 remained unchanged throughout, with the British
Museum
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 attracting the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 and the
Science
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Museum
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 consistently recording the lowest figures. Of particular note is that the
Science
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 and Natural History
museums
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 followed a similar pattern
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 both experienced an initial decrease followed by a subsequent rise. The British
Museum
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 remained the most popular
museum
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 in every month shown. Starting at 600,000 in
June
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased noticeably to a chart-high of 750,000 in July.
This
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 peak,
however
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, was short-lived as the figure fell sharply to 500,000 in August before recovering to 650,000 in September. Meanwhile, the Natural History
Museum
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 ranked second throughout the period. In
June
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to
this
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museum
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 stood at 550.000, a figure that
then
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 declined significantly to around 380.000 in July and remained unchanged by August.
However
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, the
museum
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 regained some popularity in September, with attendance increasing to approximately 490,000. The
Science
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Museum
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,
on the other hand
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, lagged behind the other two
museums
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. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 to
this
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museum
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 saw an uninterrupted decline from 400 in
June
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 to 300 in August, after which it increased considerably, closing the period at 450.000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, june, science, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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