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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

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The
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 graph above illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England between 1980 and 2010.
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, Art Gallery shot up at the beginning of the
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, but
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 decreased and got the lowest
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at the end
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. Pavilion used to have the second biggest
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, but increased to a bigger
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 than the gallery. Pier fluctuated during the
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 and had the lowest
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 for almost the entire
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. The festival was fluctuating as well. Another interesting point is that Pavilion’s
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 rose to 48%, which is the highest coefficient during
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. Blue
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 accounted for 22% in 1980, but shot up to 37% in 1985. Unfortunately, it fell to 20%
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 and decreased to 9% from 1995 to 2010. The Orange
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regarded for 24% and increased to 27% in 1985, but
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 it rose sharply to 40% and to 49% in 1995. After that, it fell to 34% in 2000 and decreased slowly to 31% to 2010. Grey
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 occupied 10% at the beginning of the
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, and fluctuated during all time, and stayed in the zone of percentages from 10% to 20%, but stopped on 23% in 2010. Festival accounted for 30% in 1980, and fell gently to 38%, and became even smaller in 1995 (26%).
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 it increased slowly to 37% in 2000, and stayed the same until 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, period, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shot" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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