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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

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The provided bar chart illustrates the Gross Domestic Product from the IT and
Service
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Industry
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 of the UK between 1992 and 2000. The units are measured in percentage of
GDP
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.
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, it can be seen that the IT
industry
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 had
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 bigger contribution
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than the
service
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industry
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. Commonly, both industries saw a significant increase.
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, the IT
industry
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 had a slight fall in 1996. In terms of the IT
industry
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, the contribution to the UK's
GDP
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 started at over 6% of
GDP
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 in 1992.
This
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 figure increased slightly to 9% of
GDP
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 in 1994. Over the next 2 years,
this
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 proportion saw a slight decrease in 1996 to around 8%. In any case,
share
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 of
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 in the subsequent years saw a dramatic
grow
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. The number jumped to 12% in 1998 and peaked at nearly 15% in 2000. Turning to the
service
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industry
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, in 1992, it accounted for exactly at 4% of
GDP
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. before experiencing a dramatic increase to over 6% in 1994. The consistent upward trend
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continued until the end of
period
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the period
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, with
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service
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the service
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 sector's contribution finishing at nearly 9%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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