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some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recyclings for governments to make it legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

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Many
people
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 think that not enough
waste
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 from houses
are recycling
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is recycled
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. They thought that the only way to increase
the
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apply
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recycling is if governments make it
legal
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a legal
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 requirement.
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 without
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laws
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laws,
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 many
people
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 did not give attention to
things
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 that can be
recycle
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recycled
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 and just throw them
to
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in the
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rubbish
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, I strongly agree that
laws
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 are necessary to teach
people
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 how to recycle their
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waste
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waste,
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also
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 reduce the
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number
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amount
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 of
rubbish
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 by taking important
things
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 from it. Nowadays many
rubbish
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are
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is
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 thrown away
and
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, and
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 inside there are the
things
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 that can be
recycle
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recycled
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. Many individuals may not pay attention
while
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 collecting
rubbish
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 and may pick
the
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apply
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things
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 like
bottle
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bottles
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 or container by not understanding that they can be
recycle
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recycled
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.
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, it is true to say that in the streets or roads we can often see that there are
bottle
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bottles
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 and other
things
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 that
thrown
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are thrown
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 by
people
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.
Laws
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 can be important for both reducing the
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number
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amount
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 of
rubbish
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 and
teach
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teaching
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people
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 to throw
rubbish
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 and keep
the
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apply
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things
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 that possible to recycle them. Everyone will do what
law
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the law
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says
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says,
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that if its
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whether it's
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 correct or not. Introducing
this
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 type of law government can benefit from both reducing the
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number
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amount
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 of
rubbish
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 and
introduce
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introducing
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people
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how
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to how
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 to recycle
the
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various
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number
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 of
things
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.
For
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example
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example,
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 if there is
charge
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a charge
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 for
people
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 who throw their
waste
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 and
not
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do not
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 recycling them,
people
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 start to follow the law
and
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, and
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 it can increase the recycling
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,
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while
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apply
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by not introducing
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laws
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laws,
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people
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 can
further
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throw
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explore
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 the possible
things
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 that can be recycle
,
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.
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 I believe that
laws
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 are important if government introduce the
laws
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 or charges,
people
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star
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start
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 to recycle most of their
waste
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 immediately.

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task response
Task response: Give a more direct answer to the question in the first paragraph. Say clearly why you agree and how laws help.
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Task response: Add one more clear main idea, such as how laws work with bins, school learning, or fines.
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Task response: Use a more specific example. Your street example is general. Give one real case of bottles, paper, or food waste.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check sentence order. Some ideas repeat, so try not to say the same point again.
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Task response: You answer the question and your position is clear. You agree that laws are needed.
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Task response: You stay on the topic of home waste and recycling through the essay.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use some linking words like while, for instance, and for example.
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