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the graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the Unite Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by seleing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line shows
percentage
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the percentage
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 of carbon dioxide emissions in metric tonnes for in individules in four country Unite Kingdam,Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the people in the
Uk
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UK
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 spend the highest
figure
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 from all countries
thurghout
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throughout
 the
period
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 , in addation the
Portugal
Punctuation problem
, Portugal
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take
Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
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 the
loest
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lowest
 in begin before they
rising
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rise
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 throughout the
period
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. In 1967,
one person in
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the
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 UK
emissions highest
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had the highest emissions
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figure
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it
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of
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 11 CO2 and decreased gradually over the
period
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 to the
loewst
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lowest
 7 per personal ,
in contreast
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apply
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the individual in portugal beginig in lowest
figure
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1
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of 1
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and increased gradually over the
period
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there
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, there
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 was 5 the high number for
portugal
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Portuguese
 people
on the other hand
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,
Italy
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Italian
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 people
emission
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emitted
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 4 in 1977, after that sharply increased
in
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from
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 1997 to 2007,
the
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The
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figure
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remaind
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remained
 stable
to
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at
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 7 CO2
emission
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emissions
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 in metric tonnes. The
swedan
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Sweden
 had varatation
figure
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begin
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beginning
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 in 1967 at 8 , and it peaked at 10 in 1977 and
then
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declind sharpaly
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declined sharply
 to 5 in 2007 .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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