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Band 4

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic problem. 1.Do you agree or disagree. 2. What other measures do you think might be affected.

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argue
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fuel
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 to solve the rising
traffic
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 congestion.
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 of
petrol
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 is the best
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 to solve the growing
traffic
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problem
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 I do believe increasing the
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fuel
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 as a crisis in
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, increasing the
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 of
petrol
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cars
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 and society
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the public
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 transportation. There is a common practice
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large country for reduce
traffic
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 congestion.
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, people use public transport most of all if
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buses
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 often.
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, if the
price
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 of
petrol
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increase
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increases
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, it will
increase
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pass
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cost
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 of buses and
getting
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lead to
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, I do believe increasing the
price
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 of
fuel
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increase
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 prise all of them, because if
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increase
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price
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fuel
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crises. The
petrol
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such
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 as public transport, delivery cars, etc.
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, nowadays society
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deliver
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delivery
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foods
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food
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 at home because of
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the increasing
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price
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 of
petrol
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the
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price
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this
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getting rise
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rising.
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, increasing the
price
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 of
fuil
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fuel
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way
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solve
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traffic
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 congestion. What other measures I think might be affected,
introdusing
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introducing
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like
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increase
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increasing
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bus
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 lines, rent bycicle sytem, inrease metro branch are concern to reduce trafic jams. In conclusion, increasing the
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 of
petrol
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 is not the best
way
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 to solve the growing
traffic
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problem
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, yet I feel that it is
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necessary
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introduce
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good
way
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 for solving
this
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problem
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.
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, increasing the
price
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 of
fuel
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 is
getting
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becoming
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 another
problem
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such
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, such
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 as a crisis in
country
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the country
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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Say clearly if you agree or disagree, then add more other ways to cut traffic.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea easy to follow. Use one topic for each body part.
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Support each main point with a clear reason and one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like First, Also, However, and As a result.
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Check that each sentence fits the question. Some parts talk more about price rise in general than traffic.
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You answered both parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
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You tried to give examples about buses and food delivery.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • traffic jams
  • public transport
  • alternative means of transportation
  • cycling
  • carpooling
  • economic impact
  • financial strain
  • commute
  • inadequate public transportation
  • carpooling lanes
  • bike lanes
  • dedicated public transport routes
  • public transport infrastructure
  • investing
  • congestion charges
  • peak times
  • navigable
  • flexible working hours
  • remote working
  • rush hours
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