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Writing Samples
Band 2

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that
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 with others can creat disunderstanding problem in chat.
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people
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towards
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 the viewpoint that there
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 nothing
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 the different
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languages
. I would like to
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support
the idea that will have
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 in the daily communication. On the one hand, the more demonstrate is there are
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plenty of
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 our conversation.
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, I really believe that different
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languages
 can disrupt the
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chatting
 when we
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 the hospital, supermarket
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 so on
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 will influence the
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 of talking. In other
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, in academic and career
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,
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's mind smooth will be impact to lack of
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willingness
 to communicate
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, there is no reason
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for some
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 to believe
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that
 different
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languages
 can't separate
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 in the same location. One of the main
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 is
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people
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that people
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 can talk easily by using
device
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a device
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 to translate.
This
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 means that we can chat with each
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 without any
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 which AI can
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 and eliminate the cracks between
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pupils
. In conclusion,
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seperate
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separate
 from each
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other
, it still will create crack between
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's
relationship
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.

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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the first part.
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Add one clear example for each main idea. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain your main points more. Some ideas are too short, so the reader cannot fully understand them.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like first, also, for example, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Now, some parts feel broken.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You try to discuss both sides before your final view.
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Your main idea is about real life talk in daily places like hospitals and shops.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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