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the charts below show the level of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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report
 gives information about the level of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised
countries
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 between 1980 and 1990 .
Overall
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, between developing and industrialised
countries
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, there is a significant gap where industrialised
countries
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 were at the highest position over these two periods . Developing
countries
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 recorded, in 1980, with around 2
years
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 of schooling before slightly rising in 1990 to almost 4
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years
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years,
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while
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undustrialised
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industrialised
countries
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is
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 already shown with approximately 9
years
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 before
neglectly
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negligibly
 increasing to roughly 11
years
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 .
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, over these two questioned times the number of
scientist
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scientists
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 and technicians per 1000 people
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along
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, along
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 with spending on research and
development
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development,
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 were very low
to
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,
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 respectively 10 per 1000 people and 50
dollar
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dollars
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 in developing nations, unlikein inundustrialised
where
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, where
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 the quantity was much higher
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, with
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 more
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than 60
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 per people and almost 350 dollars .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall, compared with, increased, rose, higher, lower, gap, spending, education, research, science, average years of schooling, scientists and technicians, per 1,000 people, developing countries, industrialised countries, as a percentage of GNP, from 1980 to 1990
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