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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

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The given bar chart provides
infomation
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information
 about
ratio
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the ratio
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 of rented and owned households in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 there is an increasing trend of owned accommodation
through out
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throughout
 the period and
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
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last
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the last
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 year as there is a downward trend in rented housing over the period. As for owned house, the percentage was about 21% in 1918 and
gradual
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gradually
 increased by 31% in 1939. The percentage remained
same
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the same
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 in 1953 and peaked at around 40
percent
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per cent
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 in 1961. The ratio continued to climb gradually and hit a
highest
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high
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 point in
2001
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2001,
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 around 69%. In
case
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the case
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 of rented housing, the proportion was significantly higher in 1918
to
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, at
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 approximately 78% and plummeted to 68% in 1939. The ratio was
leveled
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levelled
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 in 1953
and
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, and
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then
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 there is an remarkable decline in 1961
was
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, which was
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 around 58%.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 was 50% in 1971 and
decrease
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decreased
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 dramatically to 40% in 1981.
Proportion
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The proportion
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 of rented
house
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houses
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 was 31 % in 1991 and slightly fall by 30% in 2001.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • owned accommodation
  • rented accommodation
  • England
  • Wales
  • chart
  • between
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuate
  • rise
  • fall
  • peak
  • significant
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • steady
  • dramatic
  • overall
  • range from
  • at the beginning of
  • at the end of
  • over the period
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