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The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

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The given bar chart provides the percentage of expenses
share
Replace the word
shared
 in different sectors between four countries.
Overall
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, there is an increasing trend of spending in food and housing items as there is
an
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a
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 downward trend in transportation, health care and
in
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the
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 clothing industry. Expenses related to housing,
percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
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 of food consumption in
United
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the United
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 States was around 14% and increased slightly to 15% in
Canda
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Canada
. People in
Canda
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Canada
 spend 20% of their money on buying fruits and vegetables.
However
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, 23 percent japenes utilize more
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then
Use the right word
than
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 other countries
on
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in
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 eating products. As for housing and
trasportation
Correct your spelling
transportation
,
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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 ratio of American people use their cash in purchasing houses
account
Correct subject-verb agreement
accounts
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 for 26
%
Punctuation problem
%,
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as
this
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 ratio decreased dramatically among
Canadian
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Canadians
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. 15% residents in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom spent their expenditures in
transportation
Correct article usage
the transportation
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 sector
as
Punctuation problem
, as
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 Canadian Invest 20% in public transport.
Lower
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A lower
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 ratio of UK citizens
about
Punctuation problem
, about
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 2
%
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%,
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kept their
fund
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funds
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 for health care
as compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
United
Correct article usage
the United
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states
Capitalize the proper name
States
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • share of spending
  • total spending
  • the largest part
  • the smallest part
  • a high share
  • a low share
  • spend more on
  • spend less on
  • similar to
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • almost the same
  • clear difference
  • in all four countries
  • compared with
  • account for
  • make up
  • food
  • housing
  • transport
  • health care
  • clothing
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