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All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

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All undergraduate courses of university should include a time
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spent studying abroad or working. I think that the advantage
how it makes
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of making
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 students more experienced outweight than the disadvantage
they should
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of
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 studying
for
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to
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 become a specialist. The advantage it is a new
experiance
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experience
.
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a
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something new
how
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about how
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communicate
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to communicate
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 with diffirence society and be responsible for thier choice.
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nowadays
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nowadays,
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 a lot of
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people
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young people
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 are narrow-minded among young
people
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. In Japan, most
of
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young
people
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 live, work and retire in their country, but I think that Japanese
university
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universities
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 should include
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 period of studying abroad
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 get new minds and opinions.
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,
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 experiance improve
people
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 from ordinary
teenager
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teenagers
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 to
adult
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adults
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.
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, young
people
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 should learn
materials
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about materials
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 in their
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own countries
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.
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,
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 a lot of young
people
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 know a lot, but without depth.
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, students who study in
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 learn everything, but they are
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at a
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medium level
in
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everywhere.
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, all universities should cancel
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 period.
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, I believe that all
university
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universities
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 should include
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 period, because most
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young
people
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 in
developing
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the developing
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 part of society have a
little
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limited
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 outlook.
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this
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 reason, I think that the advantage outweight than the disadvantage.

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Answer both sides more clearly. Say why the good side is stronger than the bad side.
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Use one main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it with a clear example.
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Make your opinion the same from start to end. One sentence says keep this period, but one sentence says cancel it.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clearer order. Start with topic sentence, then reason, then example, then short result.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, like first, on the other hand, for example, therefore, and to sum up.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts jump too fast.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
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You include an example about Japan, which helps support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear paragraph shape: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like on the other hand, therefore, and consequently.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • study abroad
  • work placement
  • real-world experience
  • practical skills
  • academic knowledge
  • open-minded
  • independent
  • self-confidence
  • adapt to change
  • career chances
  • cultural understanding
  • language skills
  • financial cost
  • family responsibilities
  • compulsory
  • flexible choice
  • personal growth
  • hands-on learning
  • future employer
  • equal opportunity
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