The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education center taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.

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The pie charts compare the proportions of students enrolled in different courses at an adult education centre in 1985 and the current year.

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, modern languages

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the most popular course in 1985,

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IT has become the largest category

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year.

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, music appreciation and local history have disappeared,

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most of the remaining courses experienced only modest changes. In 1985, modern languages accounted for the largest share of enrolments at 24%, followed by fitness and dance at 22%. Art, local history and cookery represented 17%, 15% and 14%, respectively,

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music appreciation was the least popular course, attracting just 8% of students.

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year, the newly introduced IT course has become the most popular, accounting for 27% of enrolments. Fitness and dance remained unchanged at 22%,

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cookery increased to 19%.

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, the proportion studying modern languages fell to 17%, equal to a decline of seven percentage points, and art slipped slightly to 15%. Meanwhile, the music appreciation and local history courses were no longer offered.

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Jul 15, 2026

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