The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The

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number of Japanese

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Tourists started

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tourists

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travelling to Australia in 1985

were

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was

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around 4.5 millions and in the following

year

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year,

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it had

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increased by

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1/4

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more than

1985

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in 1985

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The

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. The

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number of

tourist

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tourists

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increased steadily till

1990

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1990,

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from 1/2

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to 1 1/2

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and

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at the same

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time

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there was a fall in the figure in

1991

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1991,

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about 1/4

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tourists

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comparing the 1990 as one can say it surge. In 1992 it picked up again and gone upto 11 3/4

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tourists

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(ie

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3/4

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more than the year 1991. In 1993 it reached

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12

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tourists

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and

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in 1994 and gone steadily increased till 1995. In

1994

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1994,

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it reached 13 3/4

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and

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in

1995

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1995,

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it touched around 15 1/2

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tourists

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.

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the same

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time

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time,

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if you talk in

percentage

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of the Japanese

tourists

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between 1985

to

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and

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1995 (ie

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Australia's share of Japan's tourist Market it stood from 2

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percentage

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per cent

to 6

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percentage

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per cent

in 1995

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at the same

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it

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, it

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reached its peak in

1994

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1994,

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more than 6.25%. When you see the

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graph,

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it gone upto 4.9% in 1989

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there was a surge again in 1990, and it was about 4.25%. The

increasement

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increase

started from 1991

till

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to

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1994 at

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rate of 2% approximately every year

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at

last

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in 1995 the

percentage

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dropped

about

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by about

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.25%. The highest

Japanese

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number of Japanese

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tourists

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travelling abroad was in 1995

and

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at the same

time

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highest

percentage

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was in 1994 (

ie

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i.e., 6.25%

) 6.25%