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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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When we see the graph,
domestic
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the domestic
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 household is different
of
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from
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 others.
According to
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 the graph
number
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 of
complaints
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 remained stable about
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factories
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factory
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 noise from 1984 to 1966. It means most of
skills
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the skills
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 and something made
from
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in
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factories
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.
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However
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However,
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 society is
getting change
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changing
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, so in the future
people
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don't
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won't
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 have to go
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factories
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to factories
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, they can do most
of
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apply
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things
,
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apply
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 at home. Maybe
factories
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 will
be
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apply
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decrease.
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Number
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The number
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 of
complaints
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 dropped steadily about road works from 1980 to 1996. It shows us most of
road
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the road
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 works
,
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that
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 were formed in the past.
Now days
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Nowadays
people
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 don't have to road works because
there
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they
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 already were todays.
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Number
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The number
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 of
complaints
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 increased sharply about traffic noise from 1990 to 1996. It remained the same from 1980 to 1984.
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then
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Then
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 it dropped from 1985 to 1988.
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However
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However,
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 it increased from 1988,
it
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which
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 means
,
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apply
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 many
people
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 have their own car and society is getting
change
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changed
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.
Now-days
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Nowadays
 cars are necessary in our life
and
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, and
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it
Fix the agreement mistake
they
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 will
be increase continues
Correct word order
continue to increase
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.
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Number
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The number
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 of
complaints
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 reached almost
peak
Correct determiner usage
its peak
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 about domestic
household
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households
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 in 1996. It increased suddenly from 1990, and it is
highest
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the highest
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to
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among
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 others. It means
people
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 want domestic
and
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, and
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 many
people
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 did that.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, complaints, factories, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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