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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at

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The two plans illustrate the layout of
a
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 ground floor of a
museum
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 in 1990 and how it changed by 2010.
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, the building became more modern and visitor-friendly over the 20-year period.
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 some of the existing areas were renovated or replaced, several new facilities were introduced.
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, the nature
history
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room
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,
museum
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 office, and local
history
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room
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 remained in the same location. In 1990, there was a Gift shop in the north-west corner and in the east
one
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 an Archaeology gallery. By 2010, the Gift shop was combined with a Cafe, and the Archaeology gallery had been replaced by a children's interactive zone.
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, between the Children's zone and the Local
history
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room
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, a poster display area was added. The reception counter was relocated and redesigned into a diagonal shape.
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, the statue, which had originally been positioned near the stairs, was moved to the
center
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 of the
museum
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.
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, a lift was installed between the Cafe and the natural
history
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room
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.
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, the
museum
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 underwent significant improvement to provide more services and a better experience for visitors.

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Task response: You cover the main changes well, but add one or two more key details, like what stayed the same and what was removed, in a more full way.
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Task response: Use more exact compare words like 'while', 'whereas', and 'in contrast' to make change clear.
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Task response: Check small word errors, for example 'nature history room' should be 'natural history room'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put similar changes in one group. For example, write one part for rooms that changed, and one part for things that moved or were added.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some links are a bit basic because you use 'also' many times. Try other simple links like 'in addition', 'meanwhile', or 'by contrast'.
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Task response: You give a clear overall view of the main change: the museum became more modern and easier for visitors.
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Task response: You include important examples, such as the cafe, children's zone, poster display, lift, and moved statue.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your first paragraph gives a good overview and mentions both change and no change.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is mostly clear, and the reader can follow the two maps without much trouble.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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