When asked to choose betwee a life without work and working most of time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In contemporary society, it is argued that if given a choice to live a life without any
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and to
work
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almost
everyday
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, people will opt
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not to
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. I completely disagree with
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statement because
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work
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pressure, it
provide
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provides
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individuals
to
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with the opportunity to
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maintain relationships with peer and leadership quality will be enhanced.
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,
workplace
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the workplace
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offers more psychological benefits that
finacial
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financial
security alone cannot replace. Spending time at home will lead to boredom, and permanent leisure can affect the motivation to do something.
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, doing a job offers
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a sense
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of purpose
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as achieving goals build self-esteem and
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a clear
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identity.
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,
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place environment shapes our mental structure, doing daily routines keeps
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the mind
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sharp and prevents stagnation.
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, working at a office
enable
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us to connect with various people
with
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different
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qualities
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. It serves as the primary community for adult friendships.
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, leading a team together, sharing ideas, and completing a given project together
promotes
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leadership quality, critical-thinking, and problem-solving skills. Sitting at home may lead to isolation and reduced social interaction
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, which may
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develop
depression
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into depression
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.
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, during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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,
due to
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reduced social interaction
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almost suicidal
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the suicide
rate increased from 10
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to 25
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during 2019-2020. In conclusion,
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not being employed may offer benefits
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as leisure, working on
passion
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a passion
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or personal interests that will not provide any long-term benefits. Ultimately, I believe that being in a workplace and doing a job fosters
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mental and
physical-well being
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physical well-being
and gives
a
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meaning
for
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to
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our
life
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lives
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • financial stability
  • sense of achievement
  • personal satisfaction
  • structure and routine
  • mental challenges
  • social interactions
  • motivation
  • burnout
  • freedom
  • leisure
  • pursue hobbies
  • identity
  • purpose
  • balanced approach
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