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"Some people believe that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

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Nowadays, there has been a question whether
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university
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a university
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 degree should be free for everyone. I completely agree with
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 view because as the number of
students
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increase
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increases
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,
economic
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the economy
 of the
country
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which provide
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that provides
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 free
education
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 significantly
grow
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grows
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.
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, there are members of society who need financial support in
education
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 because the cost of
the
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university
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education
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 is high. On the one hand, I completely agree with
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 statement because the
edication
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education
 should have
invest
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invested
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 and
provide
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provided
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 free
tutions
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tuition
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 fees for
students
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. In order to make the economy of the
country
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 higher.
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 is mainly because
that
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only educated and smart
students
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 can enhance the countries' infostructure.
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, there are a lot of grants and
scolarships
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scholarships
 in China which provide grants for all
students
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 with
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good marks.
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,
this
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country
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 observed significant changes over the previous decades, and
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shows
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 big improvement in AI, robots and buildings.
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 why I agree with
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 view because of the reasons that free
education
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 can upgrade the general view of the
country
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.
On the other hand
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, the second reason why I agree is the poor people who cannot afford the
education
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due to
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 problems related to
the
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financial drawbacks. People with
the low-income profit
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low incomes
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 could not pay for
the
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university
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 because many of them are not able to find
such
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 a big amount of money.
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, famous and popular universities like Harvard, Oxford and Cambridge. In conclusion, I completely agree with
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 statement that
university
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education
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 should be free for everyone.
This
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 is because
for the
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 several reasons
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such
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, such
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 as
econimu
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economic
 and the poor kind of people. дай мне мой бал и напиши мои ошибки

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Answer all parts of the question more fully. You say you agree, but you need to explain your view in a deeper way.
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Add clearer main ideas in each body paragraph. One main idea, then explain it, then give an example.
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Your examples are not clear enough. Try to give one real and direct example that clearly supports the point.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer paragraph plan: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion. Your plan is there, but some parts are too short.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas more clearly. Some sentences do not connect well to the next sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Develop the second body paragraph more. Right now, it is too short and does not fully support your answer.
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You clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You try to use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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