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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph provides information on Dubai gold
sales
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 in 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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sales
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 of gold
changes
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change
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 significantly
throught
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throughout
 the period.
Although
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sales
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 increased dramatically,
it
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they
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 dropped steadily.
Moreover
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, there has been a minor rise
at the end
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 of year. In 2002, the
sales
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of the
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in
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 Dubai in
january
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January
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 experienced an upward trend, accounting for approximately 250
million
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dirhams
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. There was a considerable increase in
march
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March
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 by 100
million
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dirhams
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, which was
following
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followed
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 by
the
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a
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 decline for the next 5
month
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months
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 (from 350 to nearly 125
million
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dirhams
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)
reaching
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, reaching
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 its highest point.
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, in the second half of the
year
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year,
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 there can be observed a fluctuation in August.
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, by December, the
sales
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 of gold experienced an increase, accounting for 200
million
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dirhams
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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