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the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison.

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The line graph demonstrates the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974
and
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 2002 by four modes transports.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 road remained with the highest quantity,
whereas
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pipeliine
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pipeline
 was the lowest.
Moreover
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,
water
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 and
rail
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 started at the same rate;
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however
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 the
water
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 overtook the
rail
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 by the end of the graph. In the second half of
the
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1974,
although
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 the
water
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 and
rail
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 stood at 49
million
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 tonnes, after four years they
dieverged
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diverged
, and
goods of
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water goods
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water
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 outperformed the
rail
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, which was
following
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followed
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 by
the
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a considerable increase
at
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 just below 60
million
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 tonnes in 1982.
While
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rail
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 stayed constant in 1994,
water
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 increased sharply, having stood at just over 60
million
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 tonnes.
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, the figures of
rail
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 fluctuated, and by
the
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2002 it remained
unchangeable
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unchanged
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 as it was at the beginning. Turning to the road and pipeline, they both showed
a
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different
amount
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amounts
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 of money, 70
and
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million and
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 about 5
million
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 dollars, respectively.
Then
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 increased sharply, and in 1982 it had nearly 22
million
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 dollars, which was
following
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followed
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 by a constant rate until 2002.
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, road grows steadily
troughout
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throughout
 the period, and made just below 100
million
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 dollars.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, rail, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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