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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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The
internet
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 these days is more popular and fashionable,
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 magazine old foishn and no longer read by families, and that makes it in past. The
internet
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 has exposed the world , and every one exercising it. The younger, adult and older people can use the
internet
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 , searching for social media and looking for news by using a phone, tablet or laptop. Nowdays
internet
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 can give me all that I want , and when I am sitting in my house.
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Internet
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 improves all aspects and creat Ai that most people apply to handling daily. Research has shown millions of users
adoption
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 AI for daily life and ask it for everything , and they enjoyable with
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 responed as soon as possible.
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, I depended on AI to translate my emails and responses.
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, I can not live without the
internet
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 because I will lose everything. I save all my significant things on the
internet
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.
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, newspapers are old-fashioned and not as popular as before. In past was newspapers were one way to expand the news because there was no
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 or an easy way to send the news
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 it cost all of money and was not good for the environment. Recently, the report of enviroment has shown many
journal
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journals
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 thrown on the streets by humans.
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, schools throw books on the ground because of the student.
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, I beleive
internet
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 has magic power , and it controls the future , and with
this
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 new genertion the
internet
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 is most popular,
whereas
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 daily become a thing of the past , and only the older community will use them.

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the first part.
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Write more about newspapers, not only about the internet. Compare both sides in a clear way.
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Give examples that are clear and easy to understand. Make sure each example helps your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body part. Then add 1 or 2 supporting sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts now feel sudden or not fully linked.
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You give a clear opinion at the end that the internet is more popular now.
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You include some examples from your life, like using AI for emails.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words like however, on the other hand, and to sum up.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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