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You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter, say: • what the content of the music concert is • where and when the music concert is • why you think your friend should go to this concert

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Dear Archi, I hope you are doing well. It's been a long
time
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 since we
last
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 spoke. I am writing to invite you to a
music
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concert
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 which is going to
held
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 next week in our city. I am excited to share that I recently bought two tickets
of
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to
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 Arijit
Singh
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Singh's
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concert
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.
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,
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 there are other singers
which
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whom
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 I love, Arijit Singh is the best out of all. I was waiting
since
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for
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 a long
time
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 to attend his
concert
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 in person, and the
time
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finally
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 came.
This
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time
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he
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, he
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 will be delivering all his hit songs
adding
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, adding
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 pop and jazz
music
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 into it. It will be
mesmerising
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a mesmerising
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 feeling listening to
the
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live
music
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. The
concert
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 is on 26th July at Rogers
stadium
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, which is on
Sunday
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Sunday,
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 so we do not need to take leave from our
job
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jobs
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. The reason you came to mind is that you are
also
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 a great fan of his
and
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, and
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 you feel more connected with
music
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. I think you should come to
this
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concert
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is
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mainly because we both like the same songs and we are familiar with all
music
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 genre which makes the memory
ever-lasting
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everlasting
. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
consider
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could consider
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 my invitation and come
along with
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 me to his
concert
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. Please let me know if you have other plans on that day. Best regards, Dhara

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task response
Answer all parts in a clear way. Add one more line about what kind of songs you will hear.
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Use a more natural polite style. For example, say 'I am writing to invite you to come with me.'
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'because', and 'so'.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part. Put the singer and songs in one part, and your reason for asking your friend in another part.
coherence and cohesion
Check some sentences for grammar, because small errors make the meaning less clear.
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You answered all three points from the task.
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The tone is friendly and warm, which fits a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You used greeting and closing well.
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