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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of
money
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 spent on advertising in five types of media in France,
such
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 as television, newspapers, magazines, radio and the internet, starting from 2010 and projected spending to 2040.
Overall
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, the amount of
money
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 spent on internet marketing has increased drastically and is predicted to continue growing in the future. At the same time, a major downfall can be observed in the newspaper advertisements.
While
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 television, magazines and radio
spendings
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spending
 will probably not change a lot. The percentage of
money
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 spent on internet advertising went up significantly, starting at about 3% in 2010, reaching 15% in 2020, and will probably continue growing
up
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to 47% until 2040.
On the other hand
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, television marketing expenses had a moderate increase of almost 10% between 2010 and 2020
but
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, but
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 these are predicted to decrease to 37% in 2040.
Proportion
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The proportion
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 of
money
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 spent on newspaper advertising started at 34% in 2010
,
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;
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however
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, it will continue falling
down
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apply
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to 10% until 2040. Magazines and radio marketing expenses started at 15%
,
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apply
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 and 10 %
respectively
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, respectively
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, decreasing slowly. It is expected that both will reach 5% in 2023, after which
will
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they will
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 go down again slowly.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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