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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

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The line graph compares the amount of acid rain
emissions
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 produced by four different sectors in the UK over 17 years period from 1990 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total amount of acid rain
emissions
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 experienced a significant
down
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downward
 trend, with the electricity, gas and water supply sector performing the most dramatic decline.
While
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 other industries and domestic sectors
also
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 cut down on their
emissions
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, the
figure
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 for transport and communication are not significant fluctuations. In 1990, the electricity, gas and water supply was the main contributor to acid rain, emitting around 3.3
million
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tonnes
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.
Amount
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The amount
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 of emission decrease sharply to about 1.3
million
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tonnes
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 in 1997,
even
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and
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 continued to hit the bottom at about 0.5
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007.
In contrast
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,
others
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other
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 industries ranked
2
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2nd
 in 1997 with more than 2
million
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tonnes
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. The trend dropped steadily and
slows
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slowed
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 down every
years
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year
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, to end at 1.2
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007. In terms of transport and communication, starting at
low
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a low
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lever
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level of
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 about 0.7
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
Emissions
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 fluctuated slightly, increasing slowly to nearly 1
million
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tonnes
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 in the late 1990s before decreasing to the original level in 2007.
On the other hand
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, domestic is always the industry with the lowest
emisions
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emissions
 during the period.
To begin
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 at about 0.6
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 and gradually
decreasing
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 to less than 0.3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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