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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person

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dear sir
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Dear Sir
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 or madam
my
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My
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 name is
alex
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Alex
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i
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I
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 am one of your
customer
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customers
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in
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In
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this
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 letter i would like to inform someone who
deserve
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deserves to
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 accept an award because he
numerous
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has
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 helped on community. actually
according to
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me
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me,
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 there were many people that have exceptional attitude and knowledge.
they
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They
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also
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 really contribute to develop a organization in society.
however
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 i thought there was
member
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a member
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 of
community
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the community
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that he
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who
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 used to sufficient helping inside plenty of daily
activity
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activities
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 that
commited
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the
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 other group
.
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committed.
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he
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He
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 was my friend .his name is
john
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John
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i
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I
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 think the award that
appropriate
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is appropriate
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 is the best leader because he
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also
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has also
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 ever
have
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apply
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reached diversity recognize at other country. he was create a books about his
profil
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profile
 and experience
so
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, so
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 he was really
inspiration
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an inspiration
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 in
community
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the community
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.
he
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He
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 has
harmonic
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a harmonious
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 family and
remackable
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remarkable
 reputation as long as his career
thank
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Thank
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 you for
givin
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giving
 the matter
you
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your
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 attention.
i
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I
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 hope to hear your reply soon

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Say who the person is, what he does, and why he should get this award in a direct way.
task response
Task response: Use a more formal tone. Write 'I am a reader of your newspaper' and 'I would like to nominate John for this award.'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each part. First, say why you write. Next, say what John does. Last, say which award he should get and why.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear link words like 'First', 'Also', 'For example', and 'Finally'. This will make your letter easier to follow.
task response
Task response: You name one person, John, and you give an award idea.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a greeting, a body, and an ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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