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The diagram shows the process of the water treatment.

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The diagram illustrates the steps included in the rainwater treatment.
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, the steps involve ten stages that start when rainwater enters the intake screen and is
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 pumped into the other stages and the ends with the faucet. The drink from various seas enters the pumps through the intake screen, and it is pumped into the flash mix, which involves poly aluminium chloride and oxidants mix with it.
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 it flows into the flocculation,
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 passes into the settling basin, which contains the special soil in order to clean the
water
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. In the remaining stages, the
water
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 moves into another chlorine chamber and from there flows into the filter membrane, where
water
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 is filtered. It
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 passed to another special machine which contains the chlorine, lime or sodium hydroxide, and fluoride , which disinfects the
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. Before treated
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 flows into the faucet at the final stage, it passed from disinfectors to the pump , which pumped into the faucet.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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