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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of fruit in several countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
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, Spain started at approximately 5.5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1970,
then
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 it increased slightly to nearly 6
million
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 in 1990
,
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 After that
it
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, it
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 decreased steadily over the period .
it
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 reached the lowest amount of fruit produced in
2010
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2010,
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 about 5 5.5
million
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tonnes
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.
while
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 Turkey started at around 2
million
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tonnes
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 in 1970.
it
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 increased steadily by the end of the period. France started at about 1
million
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tonnes
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 in 1970,
in addition
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 it climbed significantly 2
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990, before dropping to 1.5
million
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 in 2000, meanwhile it increased sharply to nearly 3
million
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 in 2010, it reached to a peak of 3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010. Germany,
on the other hand
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, it started at around 2,5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1970.
it
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then
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 decreased steadily to reach 1.5
million
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tonnes
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,
it
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and it
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 fluctuated at about 1.5
million
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tonnes
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 from 1990 to 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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