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The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007 . Summarize the information and make comparison.

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The depicted bar graph portrays the information about British emigrations to selected
countries
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 from 2004 to 2007. The
overall
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 summary of the given graph quite vividly illustrates that the most visited country is Australia , which shows elevated levels of progression in the bar chart from other
countries
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including
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, including
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 Spain,
USA
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the USA
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, and several other
present
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countries present
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 in the given bar graph. In detail, as we scrutinise the given information , Australia shows a steady rise , crossing fifty thousand in the year 2006 , and remained the most sought-after country which is visited by the emigrants.
However
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, the other
countries
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 did not show high results in comparison. In second place comes Spain
barely
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, with barely
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 normal
overall
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 results , but dropped in 2007.
Whereas
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, trips to France have shown a significant rise in 2005.
Furthermore
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, New Zealand and the United States
Of
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of
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 America shows significant drop in visits very least number of British people having ventured and journeyed to these
countries
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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