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University education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 100 Essential topics

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Nowadays,many
students
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 have to pay high
tuition
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 fees to receive a university
education
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.
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 , some people believe that higher
education
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 should be free for all
students
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 . I partly agree with
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 statement.
Although
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 I accept
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that
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free
education
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 has some negative
effect
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effects
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 on people , I believe that
their
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its
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 positive influences are equally significant.In
this
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 essay ,I will
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 discuss the negatives of free
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 before explaining
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its
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 benefits. On the one hand, wealthy
students
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 should pay
tuition
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 fees. Simply put, universities need funding to provide high-quality
education
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 , modern facilities and qualifies lectures. If
education
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 were free
fore
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for
everyone
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 ,governments would face a huge financial burden.
This
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 policy should mainly benefit
students
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 from disadvantaged financial backgrounds rather than
everyone
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.
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,
students
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 who can afford
tuition
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 should contribute to the cost of their
education
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.
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, free
education
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 for
everyone
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 may
reduces
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competition
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. To illustrate,
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if
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everyone
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 can enter university free of charge , some
students
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 may not value their
education
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 or work hard enough because there is
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less
competition
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.
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, academic
competition
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 may decrease , leading to lower educational standards.
On the other hand
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, talented and low-income
students
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 should study for free.
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, many capable
students
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 cannot afford expensive
tuition
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 fees.
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, gifted
students
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 from a poor family may become
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skilled
doctor
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doctors
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 or
engineer
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engineers
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 if financial barriers are removed.
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 , free
education
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 would give them equal opportunities and allow them to contribute to society in the future.
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,it increases the
education
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 level of
country
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the country
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. What I mean by
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 is that, when university
education
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 is free, more
students
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 may have a chance to continue their higher
education
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.To clarify, the country will have a more educated workforce, which
provide
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provides
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 economic and social development.
Consequently
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, the
overall
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education
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 level of the country will improve. In conclusion,
although
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 there are good arguments for
this
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 statement, I would maintain that
this
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 situation leads to low-quality
education
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 and reduces
competition
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.

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task response
Make your main view more clear from the start. You say you partly agree, but the last line sounds more like full disagreement.
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Support each main point with a fuller reason or a more clear example. Some ideas are good, but they need more detail.
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Stay close to the question all the time. Focus more on whether education should be free for everyone, not only on general good and bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph. This helps the reader follow your plan more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some words like 'Therefore', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' are used well, but some sentences still feel jumpy.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. In the last body paragraph, both points support free education, so make sure they are tied back to your main view clearly.
coherence and cohesion
You give a clear introduction and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a simple 4-part structure: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You answer the question and give your opinion.
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You use some relevant examples, such as poor students becoming doctors or engineers.
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