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The diagram illustrates a life cycle of sea turtle.Summarise the important information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart depicts the
process
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 by which the life cycle of a sea turtle occurs, beginning with the laying of eggs and ending when adult
turtles
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 return to the mating area to repeat the
process
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 again.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
process
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 of the life cycle of the sea turtle is a continuous one with no clear start or end.
Such
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 a
process
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 usually takes place in several locations, including the beach, the open ocean surface, and coastal shallow waters.
First,
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we can see that the
process
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 begins when adult male and female
turtles
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returns
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return
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 to the nesting area,
then
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 female
turtles
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 lay their eggs on the beach, which
then
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 incubate for 8-10 weeks. After
the
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apply
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hatching, the hatchlings move to the open ocean surface.
Then
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 the hatchling
spend
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spends
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 between 5
to
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and
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 20
years
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 in the open ocean that called " lost
years
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".
After
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this
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years
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year
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, adult sea
turtles
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 relocate to
developmental
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a developmental
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 migration that can
last
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 between 30 and 50
years
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.

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