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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates
utilization
Correct determiner usage
the utilisation
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 of fast food by
Australian
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the
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 younger generation of different categories between 1975
to
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and
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 2000.
Overall
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, there is an upward
trend
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 in
consumption
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the consumption
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 of hamburgers and pizza,
while
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 fish and chips
was
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were
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 the most popular food and experienced a downward
trend
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 in the coming years. Hamburgers
was
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were
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 consumed about 10
times
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 per year in
1975
Punctuation problem
1975,
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 as the
trend
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 continued to increase and reached a point to 82
points
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 in 1980.
However
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, the figure remained level
off
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apply
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from 1985 to 2000
was
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at
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 exactly
at
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apply
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100 index. Pizza was eaten by
Australian
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Australians
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 in 1975
was
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, which was
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 5
times
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as
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as much as
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 the
trend
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grow
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grew
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 gradually in 1985
was
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, reaching
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 approximately 40
times
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.
Furthermore
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, in 1995, the
trend
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remain
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remained
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 stable at 82
points
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. Fish and chips intake by adults was higher in figure among all three food in 1975 and stood exactly at 100
points
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 per year.
Moreover
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, the
utilization
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utilisation
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 started to fall slightly in
1980
Punctuation problem
1980,
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 around 82. From
onward to 1982
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1982 onward
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,
figure
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the figure
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 rose slightly
about
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by about
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 92
points
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 and
then
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drop
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dropped
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 significantly in
upcoming
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the following
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 years. In 200, 39
times
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 fish and chips
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 eaten by teenagers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, times, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-food consumption
  • the number of times eaten per year
  • overall trend
  • rise sharply
  • increase steadily
  • grow gradually
  • decline gradually
  • fall dramatically
  • remain stable
  • level off
  • overtake
  • surpass
  • the most popular item
  • the least popular option
  • a significant increase
  • a downward trend
  • reach a peak of
  • finish at
  • in contrast
  • respectively
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