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Some people think that e-book are the death of the paper books, while others think that paper books will never disappear. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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book can give you a wonderful reading experience .
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while studying
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Task response
Estimated score: 5. Your answer is on the topic, but develop each side more fully. Explain why paper books may stay for all people, not only older people. For example, paper books do not need power, are easy to share, and may help some people focus.
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Your view is clear, but keep it the same from start to end. In the end, you say paper books give a wonderful experience, then say e-books are more important. Say clearly that paper books will stay, but e-books may become more common.
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Some examples are too general. Instead of only saying old men like paper books, give a clear example: an older reader may find a real book easier to hold and read than a phone screen.
Coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body part. Body 1 should only explain why paper books will not disappear. Body 2 should only explain why e-books may take the place of many paper books.
Coherence and cohesion
Some links are not clear. For example, “This leads to save money and time” should say how: “People can buy or get books online at once, so they do not need to go to a shop.”
Coherence and cohesion
Do not use “However” after “Although” in the same sentence. Choose one: “Although paper books cost more and take up space, e-books are more useful today.”
Coherence and cohesion
Make the final part shorter and stronger. Restate both views and your view in two or three clear sentences. Do not add a new main idea about schools at the very end unless you explain it earlier.
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You discuss both sides: why some people still like paper books and why others like e-books. You also give your own view clearly.
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Your main ideas are relevant. The points about older people, cost, time, space, and more book choice fit the topic.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending. This makes it easy to follow.
Coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “First of all”, “For example”, “On the other hand”, “Therefore”, and “In conclusion”.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tactile experience
  • nostalgia
  • tech-savvy
  • portability
  • collectible editions
  • illustrated works
  • consumer preferences
  • digital devices
  • environmentally friendly
  • tactile experience
  • sensory aspects
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