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Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to anaudience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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Introduction
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But most
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task response
Score: 5. You answer both questions, but your reasons need more detail. Explain why this skill is important, for example for class talks, job talks, and daily life.
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Make your view more direct. Say if you agree fully or partly, then keep this same view in all parts of the essay.
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Add one clear example. For example: a student who can give a class talk may feel more ready for a job talk later.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put one main idea in each body part. Body 1 can explain why public speaking is important. Body 2 can explain why schools should teach it.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links: First, Also, For example, As a result, However, and In the end. Do not put many ideas in one very long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Your first line talks about two groups of people, but it does not clearly lead to your answer. Start with your main view instead.
coherence and cohesion
End with a short final view. For example: “In the end, I agree that schools should teach public speaking because it helps students in school and later life.”
task response
You give a clear view: schools should help students speak in public, and parents also have a part to play.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a start, body ideas, and an ending. You also use links such as “on the other hand”, “also”, and “to be honest”.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Articulate
  • Oratory
  • Elocution
  • Persuasive communication
  • Rhetorical skills
  • Eloquence
  • Confidence
  • Stage presence
  • Audience engagement
  • Non-verbal communication
  • Public discourse
  • Persuasion techniques
  • Presentation skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Diction
  • Anxiousness
  • Introversion
  • Curriculum integration
  • Subject mastery
  • Communication aptitude
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