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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050

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The table depicts data on earlier and predicted habitat figures in distinct countries over the period from 1990 to 2050.
Overall
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, even though
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 all countries witnessed growth, only New
Zealand
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 edged up slightly.
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 the United states cited as the paramount population, New
Zealand
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 was the least prevalent country over the entire period. Comprehensively, in
1990
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1990,
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 249.9
million
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 people chose to live in the United States, only later was projected to experience a dramatic climb to 349.0
million
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 in 2050. With 26.6
million
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, Canada was
second
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the second
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predominant
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most populous
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 country in the list in 1990, followed by the next decade, Canada’s population soared to 36.9
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million
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million,
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after which
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and
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 it
expected
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was expected
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 to be 39.0
million
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 in 2050.
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, Australia’s population amounted to 17.1
million
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 in 1990, before climbing to 22.7
in
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million in
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 2020.
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, Australia is anticipated to be 26.0
million
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 by 2050.
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, New
Zealand
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,
on the other hand
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, had only 3.4
million
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 people living in the country, whereupon it saw
slight
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a slight
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 rise
which
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, which
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 accounted for 4.3 in 2020. It is foreseen that New
Zealand
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 might only reach
to
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4.7
million
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • country
  • people
  • year
  • in
  • 2003
  • 2025
  • 2050
  • the most
  • the least
  • more
  • less
  • grow
  • rise
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • compare
  • differences
  • similar
  • different
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • small
  • gap
  • lead
  • top
  • bottom
  • by
  • and
  • but
  • however
  • while
  • whereas
  • also
  • overall
  • conclusion
  • plan
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